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WWW - There is a phenomenal amount of research here and the bibliography is very impressive.



EVEN BETTER IF -

- You don't see to understand the majority of your research or go into any detail regarding any of the studies. The whole essay never gets beyond the superficial - surely a media student can't be struggling a fight scene in The Dark Knight Rises caused by James Holmes to kill 12 people?
- It is never clear what your argument is and you seem easily taken in by the lazy right wing media approach of blaming the media.
- There are also for too many basic errors: director's name spelled wrong, clumsy sentences, quotes that do the opposite of what you are saying (see top of page 5), missing capital letters.... the list goes on
- Although you refer to many studies, you have very little media theory or theorists. You need to research and include media effects theory.
- For an essay on the effect of violence or the audience, you have almost no effects theory (hyperdermic needle, cultivation theory etc)
- Look again at the essay structure and particularly topic sentence ... you need much more clarity if you want to reach the higher levels grades.

Planning for Production

Script -

Script by SHIVUM SHARMA

INT. Drug Dealers House

In a drug dealers house there are other drug dealers who are a part of the same gang in which they are preparing drugs for distributors.

DEWAYNE, who is the main character/ leader of drug gang, is present in this scene

DEWAYNE

Hurry up with this; we need to prepare more after this batch

JAMAL, who is a part of DEWAYNE’s gang is weighing the drugs

JAMAL

Don’t worry G! It will be done before tomorrow

MICHAEL

We’re gonna make so much paper, I’m gonna buy me a 1 series with this paper

DEWAYNE

Stop gassing yourself up, and work faster

JAMAL

You’re an ediat Michael, (laughs)

EXT. ESTATE/NEIGHBOURHOD

JAY, who is a member of DEWAYNE’s gang, is dealing drugs to clients.

JAY

You got the p?

CLIENT 1

Yeah, here

JAY

SNM

Then rival gang member slowly approaching, approaches and bottles JAY

RIVAL GANG MEMBER (JOSEPH)

JOSEPH

Where you goin? (Loudly)

JAY makes noise to show he in pain

JAY

Nowhere bruv

JOSEPH

Nowhere? I just have seen you link a dot

JAY

NAH BRUV

JOSEPH

Don’t lie to man (aggressively)

JAY

Relax

JOSEPH

Don’t man to relax, what you got for me?

JAY

Nothing

JOSEPH

Take everything out of your pocket before I let one go on you

JAY takes out drugs in packets, JOSEPH picks up drugs in packets in which runs off. Jay still in pain, slowly gets up.

Fade out:

INT. DEWAYNES YARD

JAY walks in slowly and doesn’t look DEWAYNE in the face

DEWAYNE

What’s wrong with you my g?

JAY

JOSEPH just robbed man with the gear

DEWAYNE

What? (Whilst spitting out drink)

JAY

He rushed me when I linked a dot

DEWAYNE

Bruv how could you let this happen (DEWAYNE is seen as panicking)

We’re fucked, you dickhead

JAY

I’m sorry

DEWYANE

I don’t care if you’re fucking sorry, you need to get my gear back or pay for it however you can

JAY

You know I can’t do that

DEWAYNE

I don’t care, put it this way, I am taking your life or the worth for my gear…

INTERCUT PHONE CONVERSATION

JAMAL

DEWAYNE got the message

JOSEPH

That’s it bruv

JAMAL

Stay on point, safe

JOSEPH

Safe

FADE OUT:

MISE EN SCENE - 

MISE EN SCENE –

Setting

Locations – ESTATE/NEIGHBOURHOOD

The first image is a possible suggestion to what we can use for the location of an estate/neighbourhood. This is an important and appropriate location as there is a urban setting in which fits the genre of UK Urban genre.

This screenshot above is a possible suggestion to the neighbourhood in which the second scene should be filmed. This is because again this fits the genre of UK Urban scene.

Location 2 – DEWAYNES YARD

For Dewayne’s house, we decided to use an urban setting in which we scouting this location and looked the most urban setting so this will fit the UK Urban setting.

Costume –

In this production there will be characters who will be wearing casual clothing as they are young teens and casual clothing will fit the genre of UK Urban drama. Casual clothing will include tracksuits, jeans, coats, sneakers/trainers.

Lighting –

One scene out of the three will be outdoors in which natural lighting will be used and not additional lighting will be added to the scenes. However two scenes will be in a door which is off the drug dealer’s house and the drug leader’s house. The lighting that will be used in these scenes is top lighting as the scenes will be lit all around so everything will be clearly seen.

Props –

There will be props used in this production, one of which will be flour as this will be used to show a cocaine drug in which the drug dealers are dealing. Another prop that will be used is a glass bottle in which will be used to act out a fight scene and to show how violence unfolds within this production.

Actors –

In this production there is going to be actors who will be seen as serious rather than humorous rather than making sure that

Shot list -

Shot No.	Shot Type	Details of Shot	Timing (sec)
1	Long shot	Dwayne and Jamal are preparing the batch to distribute	10
2	Medium shot	Dwayne and Jamal are preparing the batch to distribute	10
3	Pan left/right	Dwayne and Jamal are preparing the batch to distribute	10
4	Long shot	Both characters are seated  around a table	5
5	Medium shot	Both characters are seated  around a table	5
6	Medium close up	Both characters are seated  around a table	5
7	Close up	Both characters are seated  around a table	5
8	Over the shoulder shot	Both characters are seated  around a table	5
9	Pan left/right	Both characters are seated  around a table	5
10	Long shot	Characters talking to one another	15-20
11	Medium shot	Characters talking to one another	15-20
12	Medium close up	Characters talking to one another	15-20
13	Over the shoulder shot	Characters talking to one another	15-20
14	Pan left/right	Characters talking to one another	15-20
15	Medium shot	Characters talking to one another	15-20
16	Medium close up	Characters talking to one another	15-20
17	Close up	Characters talking to one another	15-20
18	Point of view shot	Characters talking to one another	15-20
19	Long shot	Jay receives a package to distribute	5
20	Medium shot	Jay receives a package to distribute	5
21	Medium close up	Jay receives a package to distribute	5
22	Over the shoulder shot	Jay receives a package to distribute	5
23	Pan left/right	Jay receives a package to distribute	5
24	Medium shot	Jay receives a package to distribute	5
25	Medium close up	Jay receives a package to distribute	5
26	Close up	Jay receives a package to distribute	5
27	Point of view shot	Jay receives a package to distribute	5
28	Long shot	First client walks up to jay asking for a sample	8
29	Medium shot	First client walks up to jay asking for a sample	8
30	Medium close up	First client walks up to jay asking for a sample	8
31	Pan left/right	First client walks up to jay asking for a sample	8
32	Medium shot	First client walks up to jay asking for a sample	8
33	Medium close up	First client walks up to jay asking for a sample	8
34	Close up	First client walks up to jay asking for a sample	8
35	Point of view shot	First client walks up to jay asking for a sample	8
36	Long shot	Rival gang member (Joseph) slowly approaches Jay and bottles him	10
37	Medium shot	Rival gang member (Joseph) slowly approaches Jay and bottles him	10
38	Medium close up	Rival gang member (Joseph) slowly approaches Jay and bottles him	10
39	Over the shoulder shot	Rival gang member (Joseph) slowly approaches Jay and bottles him	10
40	Pan left/right	Rival gang member (Joseph) slowly approaches Jay and bottles him	10
41	Medium shot	Rival gang member (Joseph) slowly approaches Jay and bottles him	10
42	Medium close up	Rival gang member (Joseph) slowly approaches Jay and bottles him	10
43	Close up	Rival gang member (Joseph) slowly approaches Jay and bottles him	10
44	Point of view shot	Rival gang member (Joseph) slowly approaches Jay and bottles him	10
45	Long shot	Rival gang member (Joseph) questioning Jay	15
46	Medium shot	Rival gang member (Joseph) questioning Jay	15
47	Over the shoulder shot	Rival gang member (Joseph) questioning Jay	15
48	Medium close up	Rival gang member (Joseph) questioning Jay	15
49	Pan left/right	Rival gang member (Joseph) questioning Jay	15
50	Medium shot	Rival gang member (Joseph) questioning Jay	15
51	Medium close up	Rival gang member (Joseph) questioning Jay	15
52	Close up	Rival gang member (Joseph) questioning Jay	15
53	Point of view shot	Rival gang member (Joseph) questioning Jay	15
54	Long shot	Rival gang member (Joseph) tells Jay to take  everything out of his pocket	10
55	Medium shot	Rival gang member (Joseph) tells Jay to take  everything out of his pocket	10
56	Medium close up	Rival gang member (Joseph) tells Jay to take  everything out of his pocket	10
57	Pan left/right	Rival gang member (Joseph) tells Jay to take  everything out of his pocket	10
58	Over the shoulder shot	Rival gang member (Joseph) tells Jay to take  everything out of his pocket	10
59	Medium shot	Rival gang member (Joseph) tells Jay to take  everything out of his pocket	10
60	Medium close up	Rival gang member (Joseph) tells Jay to take  everything out of his pocket	10
61	Close up	Rival gang member (Joseph) tells Jay to take  everything out of his pocket	10
62	Point of view shot	Rival gang member (Joseph) tells Jay to take  everything out of his pocket	10
63	Long shot	Rival gang member (Joseph) tells Jay to take  everything out of his pocket	10
64	Medium shot	Rival gang member (Joseph) tells Jay to take  everything out of his pocket	10
65	Medium close up	Jay then empties his pocket and Joseph has found drugs on Jay	8
66	Over the shoulder shot	Jay then empties his pocket and Joseph has found drugs on Jay	8
67	Pan left/right	Jay then empties his pocket and Joseph has found drugs on Jay	8
68	Medium shot	Jay then empties his pocket and Joseph has found drugs on Jay	8
69	Medium close up	Jay then empties his pocket and Joseph has found drugs on Jay	8
70	Close up	Jay then empties his pocket and Joseph has found drugs on Jay	8
71	Point of view shot	Jay then empties his pocket and Joseph has found drugs on Jay	8
72	Long shot	Jay then walks in slowly but doesn’t look Dewayne in the face	10
73	Medium shot	Jay then walks in slowly but doesn’t look Dewayne in the face	10
74	Over the shoulder shot	Jay then walks in slowly but doesn’t look Dewayne in the face	10
75	Medium close up	Jay then walks in slowly but doesn’t look Dewayne in the face	10
76	Pan left/right	Jay then walks in slowly but doesn’t look Dewayne in the face	10
77	Medium shot	Jay then walks in slowly but doesn’t look Dewayne in the face	10
78	Medium close up	Jay then walks in slowly but doesn’t look Dewayne in the face	10
79	Close up	Jay then walks in slowly but doesn’t look Dewayne in the face	10
80	Point of view shot	Jay then walks in slowly but doesn’t look Dewayne in the face	10
81	Long shot	Jay tells Dewayne what has happened	10
82	Medium shot	Jay tells Dewayne what has happened	10
83	Medium close up	Jay tells Dewayne what has happened	10
84	Over the shoulder shot	Jay tells Dewayne what has happened	10
85	Pan left/right	Jay tells Dewayne what has happened	10
86	Medium shot	Jay tells Dewayne what has happened	10
87	Medium close up	Jay tells Dewayne what has happened	10
88	Close up	Jay tells Dewayne what has happened	10
89	Point of view shot	Jay tells Dewayne what has happened	10
90	Long shot	Jamal makes a call to Joseph	15
91	Medium shot	Jamal makes a call to Joseph	15
92	Medium close up	Jamal makes a call to Joseph	15
93	Over the shoulder shot	Jamal makes a call to Joseph	15
94	Pan left/right	Jamal makes a call to Joseph	15
95	Medium shot	Jamal makes a call to Joseph	15
96	Medium close up	Jamal makes a call to Joseph	15
97	Close up	Jamal makes a call to Joseph	15
98	Point of view shot	Jamal makes a call to Joseph	15

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